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Would you let me know if you think this is close to professional (able to be published) writing? 1. yes 2, no 3. don’t care and any comments would be greatly appreciated_ Alma:I ask a girl for her pbone number and she gave it too me but when I ask her on a date she says [...]
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Toshia:
I called my girlfriend a thousand times and I texed her, but she hasn't responded to me yet.
(31 December 2018)

Toshia:
A nurse told me that she left me just after making sure that I was going to be okay.
(31 December 2018)

Toshia:
I had a terrible seizure that night and I fell unconscious.
(31 December 2018)

Toshia:
She didn't know that I'm suffering from epilepsy.
(31 December 2018)

Toshia:
She started beating me on my chest.
(31 December 2018)

Toshia:
I didn't know what she was talking about.
(31 December 2018)

Toshia:
I was very nervous and confused.
(31 December 2018)

Toshia:
She told me that she can't believe my mother's words.
(31 December 2018)

Toshia:
She left my room and after a few minutes, she came back and she started yelling at me.
(31 December 2018)

Toshia:
My girlfriend said that she will do this for her.
(31 December 2018)